UNFORGETTABLE EXPERIENCE
4 year ago, I had an unforgettable experience in my life. It was when I
had study tour with my friend to Java. We went to Jakarta, Bandung and
Yogyakarta for 7 days. We went there by an airplane. It was my first time to
have a trip using an airplane so, I little bit worry and nervous. My father
drove me to the airport and he waited for me until my airplane took off. There
were some moments during the trip when I felt so happy and excited but also I
felt so fear and worry at the same time.
When I arrived at Jakarta, I felt so happy and excited because it was my
first time to spend my holiday in another city. I usually spent my holiday at
home or at my hometown in Tabanan. I was so excited and I couldn’t wait for the
trip. Although I felt so happy and enthusiastic, I felt some worry and nervous.
it was because it was my first time to have long trip and stay far away from my
parent. Sometime I felt homesick and want to back home soon. However I felt
like that I still enjoy the trip. I thought it would be fun and I could have
some good experience with my friend.
In the evening after we looked around Jakarta, we had plan to take
arrest in the hotel. Before we check in hotel we had our dinner at the
restaurant. After we finish the dinner, we tried to find our hotel to take a
rest. On the bus I felt so weird. I saw the bus driver just turned around on
the same road for several time. He couldn’t find the hotel location. He tried
to find our hotel slowly and after 5 times we turned around the road, we
finally found the hotel. After we arrived at the hotel, I had some bad feeling.
Some of my friends were also felt the same. The hotel seems so weird and
mysterious. The teacher decides the room for us and for one room it consists of
4 students. However, my room just consists of three students because one of my
friends got scared and wanted to sleep with my teacher. My room was in 5th
floor so, we need to use elevator to reach it. When I wanted to press the
button I felt strange because there wasn’t 4th floor in the button.
My friend told me that was very common in every building in Java to pass
through one of the existing floor in the building. That floor just can reach by
using stairs. At night before we sleep, we had prayed together in the room. At
3 o’clock in the morning, I suddenly woke up. I had a scary nightmare. I dreamt
about the hotel and saw many bad things about the hotel especially in my room.
It was my first time I dreamt about a place that I saw for the first time. I
was very scared and i couldn’t sleep again. I played some game on my hand phone
until morning.
After we had our breakfast at hotel we continued our trip to Bandung. At
bus i wanted to tell my friend about my nightmare but i afraid they didn’t
believe me and said i was paranoid. I kept it alone until my roommate told me
that yesterday night she heard some noise. She heard somebody knocked our door
for three times. Because she was too scared she didn’t open the door. I shocked
when I heard that. I didn’t hear anything at that time and I also told her
about my nightmare. There were some weird incidents after we leaved the hotel.
Some of my friends lose their hand phone and money. Some of my friends got
possessed and collapse and there were many strange things that happened in my
bus. We need to wait until the situation would better. We had to cancel some of
our plan and we change our schedule. We decided to continue our trip to
Yogyakarta. Because the distance from Bandung to Yogyakarta was too far and
need long time to take, we had to sleep in the bus for a night. After we
arrived at Yogyakarta we spent our time for 3 days there. We didn’t feel worry
or fear like before. We could enjoy the trip and visit many place there. In
short, when we were on our way to back to Bali, we almost got an accident. Our
bus almost crushed a truck. We were shocked and panicked. Some of my friends
were cry. We continued our way to Ketapang harbour slowly. In early morning, we
crossed to Bali.
That was an experience that full of emotion that ever had. I felt happy,
excited, fear, weird, worry, shocked at the same time. Because of that bad
experience, I always got paranoid about a trip to Java or another city. I will
never forget this experience. This trip was so challenging.
Hello Dina, Nice work overall.
ReplyDeleteHowever, just want to say that you have to pay more attention to your plural words, the mechanic and grammar also. Because, there are some mistakes in your words, which are supposed to be plural. For example: "4 year ago" it supposed to be "4 years ago"
"sometime" which supposed to be "Sometimes"
and "my friend" I think it's better to be "my friends", but this last one is up to you. hehe
In addition, the grammar is also mistaken in some parts, so please pay attention for that.
about the mechanic, I found a sentence that there is word 'so' in it. If it is in the same sentence, you do not have to add the comma (,) after the word 'so'. however, when the word 'so' is located after the period (.) you need to put comma after the word.
well, i think that's all. I hope it can help you. Good job Dina