MY PERFECT
SOUL MATE
I had someone that I
really admire. She is my best friend. We had been a friend for 3 years. We
always do everything together. For me, she is like my soul mate and my sister.
She always supports me for everything that I do. She is the only one that I can
trust. She is a person who always listens all of my story. She is a perfect person with good appearance
and good personality who always think positively and doesn’t give up easily
reaching her dream.
My soul mate has good
appearance. She is tall but thin. She has white fair skin. She has long hair
and she always braids her hair to make it look neat. She is a friendly person
with beautiful small eyes. Some people
often call her as Chinese person because of his small eyes. Her sweet smile makes her look prettier. Many
boys are looking to her because she looks so perfect.
She doesn’t only have
good appearance but she also has good personality. She is very kind and
friendly to everyone. She is also very diligent and smart person. She never
postpone and forget her homework, she do it on time. She is very clean and tidy
person. Whenever I came to her house and seen her room, it always clean and
tidy. She is an only child in her family, but she isn’t spoiled. She always
helps her parent to keep their art shop and pick up her mother in her office
every day. She is very cheerful and kind, that’s why she has a lot of friend.
She is a thoughtful
person who is always thinks positively. She doesn’t give up easily and try to
do the best that she can. Since she was child, she told me that she has a big
dream. It is to be and architect. She love drawing and sketch very much. She
always had good score in drawing class. Her parent didn’t allow her to become
an architect because of some reason. Although her parent didn’t approve it, she
never gives up easily and she still wants to reach her dream. She secretly
attempt several test for architecture program. She passed one of them and she
had good score. She proves it to her parent that she can do it. She has a
promise to herself that she will build a beautiful house for her parent later.
Now she is studying and works hard to fulfill her promise.
In short, she is a
perfect person that I have ever met. I am very impressed with her fight. She
can make all the people around her comfort and trust her. It is very lucky have
a soul mate who has good appearance, good personality and always has positive
thinking. I should learn more from her and make me to do same or may be better
than her.
You have a wonderful friend, Dina. :D
ReplyDeleteIt is so happy to have a friend who can make you comfortable like her, right? I am so happy when reading your story. :)
You have a good writing. I think, you have good thesis statement in your writing.
However, I am little bit confuse with your sentence in second paragraph. You wrote, "She is tall but thin."
I think, the correct one is, "She is tall and thin."
Overall, you have done a good job. Keep writing, Dina. :)
Hello Dina, great to visit your blog :D
ReplyDeleteYou are so lucky having a soul mate like your friend. I love your writing and I enjoy every words in your writing. :)
As Widya comment, you have a good thesis statement and well organize paragraph.
but, in this sentence "She has white fair skin." I think it is better to change like this "She has white complexion."
overall, it is a nice writing :D